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The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
The given table illustrates the number of passenger vehicles, motorcycles, commercial transportation and heavy and light
trucks
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 legalised in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
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, the biggest change was in motorcycles,
while
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 heavy
trucks
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 showed the smallest change. Another interesting point is that all types of vehicles had an upward trend. Passenger automobiles started at a point of 11
million
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 and reached 13
million
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 in 2014, raising to 18.2 per cent.
The
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 similar trend was observed among commercial vehicles, which lifted to 17.4%, between 2,3
million
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 and 2.7
million
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. Light
trucks
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 increased from 106000 to 131000 and took second place in change. Motorcycles initial number complied 570 thousand and climbed to 745000. Heavy
trucks
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 had only a third of motorcycle's success, even expanding by only 10.2
percent
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words trucks, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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