In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country., while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and giye your opinion.

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It is commonly observed that a few
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receive outrageous earnings in some countries.
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subject is a contention between
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. A group opines it is good for the nation whilst
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suggest the law-making bodies should put a cap on the amount
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can earn.
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essay seeks to look at both opinions. I will give my opinion in the course of the essay.
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with, there are various careers in the world. The qualifications and skills required to
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in each field differ. Some jobs are more involved than
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.
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, medical doctors spend six years of their lives at tertiary institutions whilst bankers only spend four years. The graduate in each of these areas acquires a bachelor's certificate in their main programs of study after University tuition.
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, in the field of
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, medical doctors have periods of running 24-hour shifts at
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bankers only
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for 8 hours each day. In comparing these two careers, it is obvious the
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of a health practitioner is more involved than that of an accountant and it is only logical for doctors to be paid higher salaries than their colleagues who
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at the bank.
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this
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, most countries allow students to freely choose programs that will suit their future careers. Most of them do so after doing some basic research about the earnings of most jobs and tailoring their decision to suit their passion and academic capabilities. In view of
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, I can understand why some
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earn more than
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and I agree it should be so in these circumstances.
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, in some nations, athletes and politicians earn outrageous income at the expense of many poverty-stricken citizens in these same countries. To illustrate
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, Ghanaian politicians receive huge monetary allowances in amounts that equal a medical doctor's monthly salary for making appearances at meetings including parliament sittings for a maximum of an hour. Meanwhile, each politician is served government-sponsored breakfast and lunch on each day of the week,
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free flight travel to every place of their choice regardless of it being for a national program or personal program.
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to these, they receive bulky salaries on a monthly basis, an amount so high enough to feed the whole nation folks for a year.
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such
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persons occupy leadership roles to amass public funds at the expense of the nation. In my opinion,
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people
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are not deserving of what they are receiving as they aren't doing much. So in effect, I agree the national authorities put a cap on how much an individual can earn in society.
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, some
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work
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harder than
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and deserve to earn more comparatively.
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, I do not agree with
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receiving outrageous salaries by virtue of their position even though they actually do very little.
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