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the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summerise the information by slecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. summerise the information by slecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided data depicts
two floor
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 plans of a
library
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 at present and how it was 20 years ago.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
library
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 has upgraded its online resources and added more facilities,
such
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 as a café, an events
room
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, and a lecture
room
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.
To begin
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 with, 20 years ago, the
library
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 had some chairs and tables for the people at the centre of the
library
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, which are now removed. On the right-hand side of the entrance, there was an enquiry
room
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 and a space for adult non-fiction
books
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. The enquiry desk
room
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 has now turned into a café. There are self-service machines and adult fiction
books
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along with
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 the information desk. Meanwhile, the children’s
books
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room
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 has now been turned into a lecture
room
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, which is in the top right section of the plan. After 20 years, the reading
room
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, which contained newspapers and magazines, was converted to a computer
room
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 on the left side of the entry.
Then
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,
adult
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 fiction book space is where all reference
books
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 are kept now.
However
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, the computer games
room
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 has now been developed as a bigger
room
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 for children’s fiction
books
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, which contains two sofas for story-telling events.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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