The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs compare the percentage of a country of families that own three kinds of electrical appliances and those families spent the amount of time per week doing
housework
from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
,
it is clear that
three types of electrical appliances constantly increase,
such
as the washing
machine
, the
refrigerator
, and the
vacuum
cleaner.
By contrast
, people spent less time on
housework
over 99 periods in 2019. In 1920,
while
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there was the lowest percentage of ownership of electrical appliances, with the washing
machine
, the
refrigerator
, and the
vacuum
cleaner, standing at 40%, 30%, and 0% respectively. The figure for spending time on
housework
stood at 50%. From 1920 to 1960, the usage of the washing
machine
, the
refrigerator
, and the
vacuum
cleaner dramatically rose, the rate from 40% to 70%, 30% to 70%, and 0% to 90%,
whereas
the spending on
housework
decreased by 30 hours per week. After 1980, there was a slight fluctuation decline in spending on
housework
, around 20 to 10%. During
this
period, the figures for the washing
machine
and the
refrigerator
remained stable, at 100%.
By contrast
, the rate of
vacuum
slightly increased from over 60% to over 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, machine, refrigerator, vacuum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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