The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graphs compare the percentage of a country of families that own three kinds of electrical appliances and those families spent the amount of time per week doing
housework
Use synonyms
from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
three types of electrical appliances constantly increase,
such
Linking Words
as the washing
machine
Use synonyms
, the
refrigerator
Use synonyms
, and the
vacuum
Use synonyms
cleaner.
By contrast
Linking Words
, people spent less time on
housework
Use synonyms
over 99 periods in 2019. In 1920,
Linking Words
while
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
there was the lowest percentage of ownership of electrical appliances, with the washing
machine
Use synonyms
, the
refrigerator
Use synonyms
, and the
vacuum
Use synonyms
cleaner, standing at 40%, 30%, and 0% respectively. The figure for spending time on
housework
Use synonyms
stood at 50%. From 1920 to 1960, the usage of the washing
machine
Use synonyms
, the
refrigerator
Use synonyms
, and the
vacuum
Use synonyms
cleaner dramatically rose, the rate from 40% to 70%, 30% to 70%, and 0% to 90%,
whereas
Linking Words
the spending on
housework
Use synonyms
decreased by 30 hours per week. After 1980, there was a slight fluctuation decline in spending on
housework
Use synonyms
, around 20 to 10%. During
this
Linking Words
period, the figures for the washing
machine
Use synonyms
and the
refrigerator
Use synonyms
remained stable, at 100%.
By contrast
Linking Words
, the rate of
vacuum
Use synonyms
slightly increased from over 60% to over 70%.
Submitted by kristy.liu910 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, machine, refrigerator, vacuum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
What to do next:
Look at other essays: