Countries are becoming more and more similliar because are able to by the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

I saw that the question contains two premises. The first premise is countries are becoming more similar, and the second one is the people now using the same
product
globally. I think that
this
is a good sign for mankind, I will explain below why I think that
this
can be a great opportunity for us in order to create a better world. Let's talk about the second premise since it is the reason for the first clause. Talking about products means that we talk about exports and imports. With the world consuming the same
product
it results in that
product
demand that goes up through the ceiling. If the demand goes up, producers will produce as many as they can to fulfil
product
demand.
This
can cause a domino effect on purchasing power globally. Though it will be a very red ocean for the producer, it still can be an extra benefit for the producer if they can win the market. It
also
can push the market to a perfect competition scheme. Another reason that I can see from
this
phenomenon is we can create a global community based on that same
product
. Since many people from around the world use the same
product
, we can have a connection through that. We can talk about that, and
also
make some jokes which can go viral internationally. The broader our connection the easier to influence others,
this
can be a way to spread kindness wider than before. As for the result, I conclude
that is
it a good thing to have the same
product
as the other country. It is
also
a good thing that many countries become the mirror image of one another.
Along with
this
situation, I can have a friend from other continents, and I absolutely love that.
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