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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
#tourists #caribbean #island
The line graph illustrates how many
tourists
visiting
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visited
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 a specific Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017, categorized by
their
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 type of accommodation chosen.
Overall
, the total visitors of
this
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island
 constantly increased over time.
In addition
, the
number
 of visitors staying on
cruise
ships
tend
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tends
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 to
positively
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grew
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in most years. The
number
 of Caribbean
island
tourists
tend
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 to
grew
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 constantly throughout 7 years. Moving to a more detailed analysis, there was a slight decrease
on
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in
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the
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apply
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cruise
ships
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ship
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habitants
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habitats
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 from 2011 to 2012.
This
also
 occurred to the
tourists
 staying on
island
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the island
an island
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 between 2015 and 2016, where it was decreased in the same amount
like
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as
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 the
cruise
ships
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ship's
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 habitants. Several years witnessed a positive growth
on
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in
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 the
number
 of
tourists
 staying on
cruise
ships
.
For example
, it increased by 0.5
millions
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million
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 between 2013 and 2014.
On
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In
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 the contrasting case, the
number
 of those who stayed on
island
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the island
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were
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was
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 mostly stagnant. Starting in 2013, there were 1.5
millions
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million
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tourists
, leveling off until 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island, number, cruise, ships with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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