The pie charts below show the spending of a school in the UK from 1981 to 2001.

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The pie charts illustrate the changes in the distribution of expenditure from 1981 to 2001.

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, it is evident that most of the money went to teachers’s salaries during the

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given and the rest of the categories experienced changes over the

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. Over the

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, the proportion of teachers’ salaries grew, first reaching a peak of 50% in 1991, after which it dropped slightly down by 5% in the ten following

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, the money used for other workers’ pay experienced a downward trend starting from one-fourth of the whole spending and resulting in only 15

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, respectively.

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to teachers’ wages, the category of resources

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as books experienced a high point of 20% in 1991,

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, it dropped significantly by half towards 2001, which is even lower than it used to be at the beginning of the

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. In terms of the rest of the categories, furniture and equipment

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insurance grew over the

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, the first one experienced a low point of only five

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in the middle of the

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, after which it substantially grew to over twenty

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. Insurance had the smallest proportion of money of under ten

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during the

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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