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The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck Country at different times of the year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.

The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck Country at different times of the year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main information and making comparisons.
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The supplied table provides data about eight different kinds of
birds
 that are conducted by presences in
Woodchuck
 Country during
winter
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the winter
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 and
summer
season
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seasons
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. As is observed, there are three species of
birds
 in the partial list
consist
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consisting
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 of cardinals, crows and woodpeckers which are not migratory
birds
. They inhabit
in
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apply
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Woodchuck
 Country in both winter and
summer
whereas
another
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other
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 types of
birds
 are always
movement
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moving
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 during the year. It can be clearly seen that the observation finds some different points.
The most
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Most
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form
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forms
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 of bird migration
such
 as bluebirds, mockingbirds, orioles and vireos regularly take place in the cold
season
. It is a reason they are just observed in the
summer
. Whilst, contrary to the species mentioned above, only one particular type of bird which is known as juncos migrate in the warm weather of
summer
 times and
then
 they choose the cold
season
 to stay in
Woodchuck
 Country. In general, despite the same species,
birds
 have different migratory times during
a
Correct article usage
the
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 year. Most of them prefer to migrate in the winter
while
 only one of
in
Correct pronoun usage
them in
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 total stayed in
Woodchuck
at
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during
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 the same
season
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birds, woodchuck, summer, season with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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