One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. Say how well you know your friend Describe the qualifications and experience that your has Explain why your friend would be suitable for this job.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
you
to recommend one of my best friends Mike as a sports trainer in your camp. Let me explain in more detail about him.
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to you
Firstly
he is one of my childhood friends and always had an ambition to share his experience with children. He is a talkative and sociable person who can easily communicate with any kinda
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kind
children
in any situation.
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of children
Secondly
, as my childhood friend, I know that he is a suitable swimming trainer. From his
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a
ages
Mike interested in swimming. Fix the agreement mistake
age
Thus
swimming competitions such
as racing in the water, water football, and swimming events can easily be conveyed with
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also
he can help children in trouble.
You are appreciated for paying attention to my letter. He always searches for suitable work himself and It will be great for both of you if you acknowledge Mike as a swimming trainer.
Yours faithfully,
Mr BeaR.Submitted by omondavlat91 on
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Task Achievement
Ensure you address all parts of the task. Do not overlook making it clear how well you know your friend beyond stating they are your childhood friend. Provide more explicit examples or stories that illustrate this relationship and how it translates into their qualifications for the job.
Coherence and Cohesion
Introduce more varied sentence structures to enhance readability and interest. While the letter has logical structure, varying sentence types will enrich the text and demonstrate greater proficiency in English.
Task Achievement
As your letter addresses a potential job opportunity, ensure the tone remains professional throughout. Utilize a closing statement that reiterates your recommendation more strongly, reinforcing the purpose of your letter.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make paragraphs focused on a single idea and clearly signal the shift from one idea to the next. Use transition words and phrases to improve the flow of your letter.