The pie chart below gives information on how people use four types of transport and the table provides of five reasons data of using a car in Edmonton.

The pie chart below gives information on how people use four types of transport and the table provides of five reasons data of using a car in Edmonton.
The provided pie chart gives information about how
people
use
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transport
and
car
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cars
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in Edmonton. Why
people
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use
the
car
in
city
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.
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Overall
, it is obviously seen that in Edmonton the most popular
transport
is a
car
,
while
bus
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buses
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and
taxi
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are not as so popular as
car
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cars
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. Getting back to the details the highest indicator among
people
who
use
transport
is
car
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the car
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. The figure
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up 45%,
by
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people
do not
use
bus
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buses
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and
taxi
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taxis
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like
a
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car
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. It constitutes only 20% collectively.
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, the second
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transport
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a
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LRT. Compare with other transports LRT is used 10% less than
car
, but a quarter percent more than bus and taxi. As can be seen from
this
diagram more than half per cent
people
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use
the
car
for
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commute to work,
then
the business which had the same proportion as the
car
.
Thirdly
, Taking children to school is 5% less than the prior category.
Additionally
, Shopping and Leisure activities have less per cent
also
, these items have the same percentage with 15%.
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