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The pie chart below gives information on how people use four types of transport and the table provides of five reasons data of using a car in Edmonton.

The pie chart below gives information on how people use four types of transport and the table provides of five reasons data of using a car in Edmonton.
#information #people #four #transport #five #data #car #edmonton
The provided pie chart gives information about how
people
use
on
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transport
 and
car
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cars
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 in Edmonton. Why
people
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do people
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use
 the
car
 in
city
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the city
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provide
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 by
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the table
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table
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.
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Overall
, it is obviously seen that in Edmonton the most popular
transport
 is a
car
,
while
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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 are not as so popular as
car
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cars
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. Getting back to the details the highest indicator among
people
 who
use
transport
 is
car
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the car
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. The figure
make
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 up 45%,
by
contrast
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people
 do not
use
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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 like
a
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car
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cars
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. It constitutes only 20% collectively.
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, the second
popular
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transport
 is
a
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 LRT. Compare with other transports LRT is used 10% less than
car
, but a quarter percent more than bus and taxi. As can be seen from
this
 diagram more than half per cent
people
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use
 the
car
for
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 commute to work,
then
 the business which had the same proportion as the
car
 .
Thirdly
, Taking children to school is 5% less than the prior category.
Additionally
, Shopping and Leisure activities have less per cent
also
, these items have the same percentage with 15%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, use, transport, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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