You have recently visited a building which is of historical importance and came to know that it's in bad condition. Write a letter to local newspaper office. Which building it is? What are the problems? What do you expect them to do?

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing
this
letter to express my concern for one of the historical monuments named the Taj Mahal which is situated in Agra, India.
Last
month, I and my friends visited the Taj Mahal to do some research
as well as
to understand the history of
this
building which was quite disappointing.
Firstly
, the doors and windows are broken by the public or weather.
In addition
, there were no garbage bins to throw waste,
therefore
, a number of people were throwing their waste on the floor.
Moreover
, the inner walls are covered with graffiti which not only causes irritation but
also
concern about
this
building. I would like you to publish
this
letter on the front page of your newspaper.
This
could be one of the best ways to grab some attention of the Ministry of History toward the monument which can be helpful to mitigate
this
issue.
Secondly
, the public should be aware of
this
issue.
Furthermore
, I have some photographs that I want you to post in your newspaper. Please feel free to contact me on my given number
as well as
e-mail. Thanks in advance for considering
this
issue. Yours faithfully, Gurpinder Kaur
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task response
Address the specific questions asked in the prompt including the current condition of the building and what you expect the local newspaper to do.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate transition words and linking devices to ensure a smooth flow of ideas and information.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and accurately.
grammatical range
Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and use of tense forms for clarity and accuracy.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

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  • moreover
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  • despite

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