The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summeries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summeries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs below show two different things, the first graph illustrates the percentages of households with electrical appliances from 1920 to 2019,
while
the other shows the number of hours of housework every week, and
also
at the same time.
Over all
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, it can be seen that all
of
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the
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three machines had risen over the period,
although
the refrigerator was the lowest amount
on
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1920, it increased rapidly by the years even before 2019.
Moreover
, the proportion of housework had
dicreased
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decreased
. For the first tool, the washing machine, 40% of ownership in 1920, and
at the end
it
rised
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rose
for
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75%. As for the
vacume
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vacuum
cleaner , started
from
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30% and ended
with
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100%
since
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the 2000s. The second one of tools increased very high from zero
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to a hundred by
the
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1980 and each one had a refrigerator.
Secondly
, in 1920 the
hourse
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house
horse
hours
were
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above 40 and fell down fastly to 15. The final number for the
hourse
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hours
house
horse
were
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10
at the end
of the period.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ownership
  • Electrical appliances
  • Households
  • Decrease
  • Increase
  • Correlation
  • Period
  • Adoption
  • Universal
  • Minimal
  • Significant
  • Early years
  • Mid-century
  • Modern era
  • Data trends
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