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You recently went to visit a friend in their new home. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter tell your friend what you liked about his/her new house say what you did or enjoyed most about your stay with your friend suggest when and where you could meet your friend next

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Dear Love Hundal, I hope you are doing great. After several years, meeting you again at your place was quite exciting for me that was
also
 my first visit to your new house. I am writing
this
 letter to congratulate you on your new home. First of all, I really loved the surroundings of your house
that is
 very beautiful and relaxing. After that, your home is
also
 decorated very beautifully with open space in the front and back yard, where we can spend
time
 together during various gatherings. I really appreciated the way you treated me, It was the same as you did during our college
time
.
Moreover
, I tried South Indian food for the first
time
 in my life; still, I loved the food prepared by your grandmother. The most memorable moment was during the evening
time
 when I got a chance to talk with your grandparents. As you already know, I am going to celebrate my birthday at my place next month. So, I want to invite you to join my birthday party and we will enjoy it
together with
 my family. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Tajinder Singh
Submitted by tajinder.panag on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, fully developed ideas in each paragraph, and a proper conclusion to enhance the logical structure.
coherence cohesion
While your greeting and closing are adequately used, consider employing more transitional phrases to better connect ideas and paragraphs, providing a smoother reading experience.
coherence cohesion
Maintain the focus of each paragraph on a single idea to enhance clarity and coherence; you've done well on this criterion.
task achievement
Your response adequately addresses all parts of the prompt, which shows good task achievement. For an even stronger response, expand on each point to fully develop your ideas and experiences.
task achievement
The writing tone is generally suitable for a letter to a friend. However, ensure consistency throughout the letter, avoiding overly formal language which may not be as appropriate in an informal context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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