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You are planning to travel and would like someone to take care of your apartment while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you will be away Ask your friend to take care of your apartment Describe the tasks you want your friend to do.

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Dear Fahim, I hope
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 email finds you in radiant health, and you are doing well. I am writing
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 letter to look after my
apartment
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 during my upcoming trip to
Canada
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.
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 with, I am going to travel to
Canada
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 next month for one week. As you know, my son has been living in
Canada
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 for studying purposes for the
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 two years.
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 I have decided to travel to
Canada
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 with my wife as recently my son has completed his final semester exam. You have been living near my
apartment
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 for long days, and as my close friend, I am requesting you to take care of my two-storied
apartment
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 during the trip. I think you will be the best person to look after my
apartment
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 as you are living just 5 minutes walking distance from my
apartment
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. There are some important tasks that usually need special attention every day
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 as my pet, and flower tree in the backyard garden. I am requesting you to ensure food for my loving pigeon thrice a day,
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 pouring water into the flower tree in the morning and evening time. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon regarding
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 matter. Yours lovingly, Faisal

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly addresses a single point for optimal coherence.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices and transition words to improve the flow of information.
task achievement
Try to maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter, avoiding overly casual language in a semi-formal request.
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Remember to address all aspects of the prompt, ensuring that no element of the task is left unclear or partially covered.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • going on a trip
  • personal commitments
  • temporary absence
  • house-sit
  • look after
  • responsibilities
  • task list
  • water the plants
  • feed the pets
  • collect the mail
  • take out the trash
  • ensure security
  • emergency contact
  • grateful
  • appreciate
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