Many people believe that all zoos should be closed, while others claim that zoos has positive impact. Discuss both views and give your opinion
People have different opinions towards
zoos
' existence
. Some may think that zoos
are a good place for us to know more about animals
. However
, A lot of people think that zoos
should be banned. In my opinion, I agree with the statement that we have to close all the zoos
that exist due to
the fact that in zoos
, animals
can lose their natural instinct slowly, and many zoos
have bad maintenance which definitely will affect their animal collection.
Besides
that, numerous people think that zoos
still have a positive impact. The existence
of zoos
is useful for children's educational purposes. Usually, in kindergarten and elementary school, they have a study tour program where one of the main choices is zoos
. By visiting zoos
, they can know
more about animal characteristics and their behaviour. Verb problem
learn
For instance
, a lion is a carnivore which means it will be dangerous if we come closer to them so we have to make a distance.
On the other hand
, zoos
have negative impacts on the animals
themselves. Their existence
actually broke the rule of animal welfare. Zoos
are not animal natural habitats. Like a tiger or elephant, they have to live in a jungle rather than in a cage which is smaller than nature. It can affect their instinct as an animal. Furthermore
, there are so many cases related to the zoos
' bad maintenance. The management prefers to pursue more profit while
not taking care of their animals
.
In conclusion, the existence
of zoos
has benefits and costs. Comparing both sides, I think all zoos
should be closed because we have to care more about animals
, they are also
like humans that have a right to live freely in their habitat. Nowadays, we can still learn about animals
without visiting zoos
, with the advancement of technology we can know more about them.Submitted by mmmuuu on
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