The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categorries during 2015 and 2016.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categorries during 2015 and 2016.
The bar chart illustrates the amount of several
export
commodities in a country between 2015 and 2016.
Overall
, the
export
values in all categories increased in 2016 compared to 2015 except for gems and
jewellry
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jewellery
which declined slightly in 2016. The petroleum products
export
amount went up approximately 2
billion
dollars
in 2016 to 63
billion
dollars
after their
last
trade in 2015 which is 61
billion
dollars
. The enginereed products transaction value started at 57
billion
dollars
in 2015,
then
, it surged to 62
billions
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billion
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in 2016. The textile commodity trade amount
also
increased significantly in 2016 and reached 32
billion
dollars
compared to its prior year value
that
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which
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marks only 25
billion
dollars
. The agriculture products category increased a little bit around 1
billion
dollars
in 2016.
On the other hand
, gems and jewellery commodity value in
export
dropped from 43
billion
dollars
in 2015 to 41
billion
dollars
in 2016.
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