The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categorries during 2015 and 2016.

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The bar chart illustrates the amount of several

export

commodities in a country between 2015 and 2016.

Overall

, the

export

values in all categories increased in 2016 compared to 2015 except for gems and

jewellry

Correct your spelling

jewellery

which declined slightly in 2016. The petroleum products

export

amount went up approximately 2

billion

dollars

in 2016 to 63

billion

dollars

after their

last

trade in 2015 which is 61

billion

dollars

. The enginereed products transaction value started at 57

billion

dollars

in 2015,

then

, it surged to 62

billions

Change to singular

billion

show examples

in 2016. The textile commodity trade amount

also

increased significantly in 2016 and reached 32

billion

dollars

compared to its prior year value

that

Correct pronoun usage

which

show examples

marks only 25

billion

dollars

. The agriculture products category increased a little bit around 1

billion

dollars

in 2016.

On the other hand

, gems and jewellery commodity value in

export

dropped from 43

billion

dollars

in 2015 to 41

billion

dollars

in 2016.

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3 paragraphs

153 words

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categorries during 2015 and 2016.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of thi development?

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It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?