The graph compares the sales of different music formats from 1994 to 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph compares the sales of different music formats from 1994 to 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph shows the
percentage
of total sales of three different
music
formats,
that is
by
streams
,
downloads
, and purchased
CDs
, between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, the total
percentage
varies between nearly 10% and nearly 60%. In 2011,
CDs
were the most purchased
music
formats
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60%, followed by
music
downloads
at nearly 40%, and the lowest
percentage
was by
streams
where
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10%. The
percentage
of
music
streams
increased gradually until it peaked at 40% in 2018. There was a steady increase
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music
downloads
until 2014 when it reached its peak at 40%, and decreased until 2018 when it plunged to 30%. On the other side, the trend of purchased
CDs
was not the same
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the others where it decreased from nearly 60% in 2011 to only 30% in 2018. It can be concluded that the number of
music
downloads
and
streams
rose steadily from the time being,
while
the number of
CDs
purchased dropped steadily in the same period of time.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, music, streams, downloads, cds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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