The table below shows the number of students at a Malaysian secondary school during two school years. the charts show the result of a survey asking these students what ttheir favourite sports is

The  table below  shows the number of students at a Malaysian secondary school during two  school years. the charts show the result of  a survey asking these students  what ttheir favourite sports is
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The table delineates the
student
enrollment figures at a Malaysian secondary school during two academic years, 2004-2005 and 2014-2015,
while
the accompanying pie charts encapsulate the outcomes of a survey gauging students' preferences for
sports
activities over the same period. In general, there was a discernible upward trajectory in the
overall
student
population, surging by 18,000 students from 73,000 in 2004-2005 to 91,000 in 2014-2015. Delving into the specifics of
sports
preferences, basketball and football exhibited remarkable popularity gains. In 2004-2005, basketball captivated 15% of the
student
body, but a decade later,
this
figure soared to an impressive 35%. Football, with a 30% preference rate
initially
, witnessed an analogous surge, reaching 40% in 2014-2015. These trends underscore a burgeoning interest in team
sports
among the
student
community.
Conversely
, tennis, once the predominant choice with 40% participation, dwindled precipitously to a mere 15% in 2014-2015. A similar decline was observed in swimming, plummeting from 10% to 5%. Intriguingly, rugby maintained a consistent 5% participation rate throughout the decade, emerging as the sole constant in an
otherwise
dynamic landscape of
sports
preferences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, sports with synonyms.
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