Television is dangerous because it destroys family life and any sense of community; instead of visiting peop/e or talking with our family we just watch television. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people think, that watching television

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of physically going somewhere like visiting our family can be very dangerous. I personally agree with

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statement, as practising sociability is very important for the family community.

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, the fact that we often see our family is very important for personal development but

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for family health and communication. It means that if people want to maintain a good relationship with another member of their family, the clue is to often visit them.

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, a person who does daily visits to his mother talks to her, communicates and tells her about his life may create a stronger relationship with others, as they will be on better terms.

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, television could not represent a real danger as screen occasions can be controlled, transforming it into a source of benefits. It means that the moments spent on it are not dangerous as far as it is not toxic for his relationship with the members of his family.

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, if I decide to spend a lot of time on screens it could directly affect my social and family life, but if I organise myself between screen time and family moments I could get the benefits from both.

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, television is not dangerous as long as the time spent on it is not abusive.

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, it is recommended to favour family occasions the most possible, because it will only increase the health of our family relations and structure.

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should lead to better communication and it wouldn't destroy family life.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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