The world is experiencing dramatic in population,which is causing problems not only for developing countries but also for developed nations Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes and suggest at least one possible solution.
In
todays
era, the world is experiencing Change to a genitive case
today's
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a drametic
drametic
in population, which is causing problems not only for developing countries but Correct your spelling
dramatic
also
for developing nations there are an
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a
number
of problems that we would me discussing
the forthcoming paragraphs.
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will discuss in
Firstly
, one of the major Fix the agreement mistake
problems
problem
of overpopulation is poverty, Fix the agreement mistake
problems
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which
that
leads to no education. Correct pronoun usage
which
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take Replace the word
Let's
Let us
an
example of one of the most populated Correct article usage
the
country
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countries
of
the world, India. It has Change preposition
in
the
population of 1.40 billion and among Correct article usage
a
them
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them,
their
are almost 10% of Replace the word
there
people
who face poverty. Because of this
, people
have no sex education that
leads to overpopulation. Another major Correct pronoun usage
which
problem
that people
face is no food
, this
is because if their
is an Replace the word
there
increase
Replace the word
increased
number
of people
then
the damand
for Correct your spelling
demand
food
increases, and the country is not able to produce enough food
that's the most common reason to
malnutrition.
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for
Secondly
, one of the huge problem
that Change to a plural noun
problems
Canada
faces due to
overpopulation is no houses or jobs for new comers
. Some of the cities like Surrey, Toronto, Correct your spelling
newcomers
Brampton
are highly populated and they have no land to build more houses or offer jobs to new students. Correct word choice
and Brampton
This
all problems result in people
living on streets
, Correct article usage
the streets
doing
crimes to earn some money for their survival, Verb problem
committing
eating
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and eating
unhygenic
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unhygienic
food
that affects their physical health. Many people
move to Canada
for better
future, but Correct article usage
a better
due to
the circumstances
they can neither go back to India nor stay in Add a comma
circumstances,
Canada
.
There are an
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a
number
of solutions to solve this
problem
. Firstly
, Correct article usage
the goverenment
goverenment
should make some rules regarding the Correct your spelling
government
governments
number
of childerns
that can Correct your spelling
children
take
birth in each family. Verb problem
be
Secondly
, their
should be free Replace the word
there
sex-education
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sex education
to
all, as many Change preposition
for
people
still not
know how to control birth. Add a missing verb
do not
Thirdly
, unlike Canada
different countries should open new small areas where the Add a comma
Canada,
new comers
can go for Correct your spelling
newcomers
bright
future.
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a bright
To conclude
, I would like to say each an
every thing has its Correct your spelling
and
problem
and the solutions. It's on oneself to know about the facts and work on that. If the population keeps on increasing day by day, soon we will be out of our natural resources and will not able
to live longer. To secure our futures, each individual should take some steps to solve Add a missing verb
be able
this
problem
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