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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they do not have to pay taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The tax is collected by every country's
government
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 from the
people
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. The debate is whether the
taxes
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 should be paid for the nation's well-being or whether there is no need to pay to the
government
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. In
this
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 essay, both perspectives will be discussed. On one hand, the common statement is that the
money
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 levied by the
government
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 is used for many contributing factors to individuals in numerous ways
such
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 as education, hospitals, agricultural benefits, and so on. Many
people
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 believe these are helpful for the underprivileged
people
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 in that respective region.
For instance
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,
people
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 from rural areas can benefit from the
government
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 schemes with
this
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 tax
money
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. Despite paying much
money
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 to the private sector through these schemes they can use the same facilities as the citizens in cities.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 have an opinion that
taxes
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 should not be collected from
people
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,
instead
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, they should use the
money
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 from the exports and imports as well and they insist the
government
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 collect
money
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 from the factories and the multinational companies. In India, there are adequate and valuable resources all over the country like food crops and eminent and decorative things. They expect that these should be gathered and imported to the other regions to get and use that capital for the
people
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. At the same time, they anticipate that
taxes
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 from the companies should be higher rate. In conclusion, the
taxes
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 should be collected minimally. In my opinion, the
government
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 should act concerning the
people
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's needs and ensure the benefits to the individuals with that tax
money
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.

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Coherence and Cohesion
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Try to develop your ideas further with more specific examples. This adds depth to your argument and helps to illustrate your points more effectively.
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While your introduction and conclusion are present, aim to make your stance clearer from the beginning. This helps the reader to understand your position throughout the essay.
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Engage more deeply with the essay prompt by discussing the given viewpoints in detail before presenting your own opinion. This ensures a comprehensive response to the task.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public services
  • infrastructure
  • redistributive measures
  • income inequality
  • welfare programs
  • mismanagement
  • reinvest
  • economic growth
  • government overreach
  • minimalist state
  • societal decline
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