The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

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The charts provide information about the percentage of

family

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families

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who

has

Correct subject-verb agreement

have

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3 types of electrical appliances (washing

machine

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, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner) and the

time

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people

spend

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spent

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apply

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doing chores in one country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall

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, it was clear that over

time

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, the amount of electrical appliances that

was

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were

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used

increase

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increased

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over

time

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and there was a fall in the

time

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each family spent on doing housework. In 1920, the number of households that had washing

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machine

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machines

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and vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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was similar, about 40% and 30%, respectively. Washing

machine

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grew to 60% in 1960,

then

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there was a slight fluctuation before it reached a peak of around 73% in 2019. The percentage of using households

used

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that used

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vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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rose significantly, surpassing washing

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machine

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machines

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in 1960 (60%) from 1920 to 2000 (30% to 100%)

then

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remain

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remained

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stable at 100% from 2000 to 2019.

Refrigerator

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Refrigerators

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saw a

dramtic

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dramatic

increase of 100% in 40 years,

then

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stayed stable to 2019. The trend for the

numbers

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number

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of households that did their chores was downward. Started with 50 hours per week, per family in 1920,

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and it

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dropped down considerably to around 15 hours. The number was unchanged from 1920 to 2000 before reached it

lowest

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its lowest

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point in 2019 (10 hours).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, time with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

207 words

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ownership
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time frame
variables
trends
significant milestones
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quality of life
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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

At present the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer with relevant example.

Some people think that the government should be responsible for crimes prevention, while others believe that it is responsibility of the individual to protect themselves. Discuss both the sides and give your opinion.

Topic: you have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect.