The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
The charts provide information about the percentage of
family
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families
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who
has
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have
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3 types of electrical appliances (washing
machine
, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner) and the
time
people
spend
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spent
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on
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apply
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doing chores in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, it was clear that over
time
, the amount of electrical appliances that
was
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were
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used
increase
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increased
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over
time
and there was a fall in the
time
each family spent on doing housework. In 1920, the number of households that had washing
machine
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machines
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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was similar, about 40% and 30%, respectively. Washing
machine
grew to 60% in 1960,
then
there was a slight fluctuation before it reached a peak of around 73% in 2019. The percentage of using households
used
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that used
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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rose significantly, surpassing washing
machine
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machines
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in 1960 (60%) from 1920 to 2000 (30% to 100%)
then
remain
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remained
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stable at 100% from 2000 to 2019.
Refrigerator
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Refrigerators
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saw a
dramtic
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dramatic
increase of 100% in 40 years,
then
stayed stable to 2019. The trend for the
numbers
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number
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of households that did their chores was downward. Started with 50 hours per week, per family in 1920,
it
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and it
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dropped down considerably to around 15 hours. The number was unchanged from 1920 to 2000 before reached it
lowest
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its lowest
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point in 2019 (10 hours).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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