The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

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The charts provide information about the percentage of

family

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families

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who

has

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have

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3 types of electrical appliances (washing

machine

, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner) and the

time

people

spend

Wrong verb form

spent

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apply

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doing chores in one country from 1920 to 2019.

Overall

, it was clear that over

time

, the amount of electrical appliances that

was

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were

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used

increase

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increased

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over

time

and there was a fall in the

time

each family spent on doing housework. In 1920, the number of households that had washing

machine

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machines

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and vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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was similar, about 40% and 30%, respectively. Washing

machine

grew to 60% in 1960,

then

there was a slight fluctuation before it reached a peak of around 73% in 2019. The percentage of using households

used

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that used

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vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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rose significantly, surpassing washing

machine

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machines

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in 1960 (60%) from 1920 to 2000 (30% to 100%)

then

remain

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remained

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stable at 100% from 2000 to 2019.

Refrigerator

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Refrigerators

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saw a

dramtic

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dramatic

increase of 100% in 40 years,

then

stayed stable to 2019. The trend for the

numbers

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number

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of households that did their chores was downward. Started with 50 hours per week, per family in 1920,

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and it

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dropped down considerably to around 15 hours. The number was unchanged from 1920 to 2000 before reached it

lowest

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its lowest

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point in 2019 (10 hours).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, time with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

207 words

6.50

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Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people believe that employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress, but they should be concerned about the quality at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The society would benefit from a ban all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose and can even been damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree?