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An old friend is coming to town and has invited you to go to the cinema. Write to your friend. In your letter • Explain that you are unable to come • Find out how long your friend is staying in town • Arrange a suitable time to meet

#friend #town #cinema #time
Dear Harley, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am glad to hear that you coming to
town
. You will have lots of fun here.
Also
, thank you for the invitation but unfortunately, I won’t be able to join you at the cinema
this
 weekend.
Firstly
, I am strongly sorry for being unable to come because I have an invitation to my cousin’s wedding. The wedding ceremony is in my hometown, so I will be out of
town
 for a few days.
Moreover
, there are many places for you to visit in the
town
, I assume that you would have to stay for a few days, but I am not sure how long will you stay in
town
. Please let me know your plan in
town
 so we can arrange the time to hang out. I will send you the list of my favourite places and restaurants, I hope you will have a good time here. I look forward to hearing from you. Best Wishes, My Ha
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Task Response
To enhance your task response, ensure that each point in the question is fully addressed. While you have made an attempt to cover all points, adding more details about why you cannot attend the cinema and proposing a more specific plan for meeting later can improve clarity and task completion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter has a good structure and progresses logically from one point to the next. To improve coherence and cohesion further, consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and closing are well-handled, setting a friendly and polite tone appropriate for the situation. To further enhance your writing, consider customising these sections more specifically to the recipient and situation, making your letter feel more personal.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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