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the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about how many
visitors
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 visited a specific
island
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 in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 between the years 2010-2017. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that
number
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the number
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 of
visitors
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 has
been
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apply
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increased
through out
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throughout
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this
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 period. At
first,
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visitors
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 who stayed on
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island
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the island
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 were more than the
one
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ones
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 who stayed on
cruise
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a cruise
the cruise
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 ship. In 2010, 1
million
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 people in total visited
this
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island
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.
This
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 number experienced a gradual increase to almost 2.7
million
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 in 2016.
Then
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 it was a significant rise to 3.5
million
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visitors
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in
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at
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 the end of the period.
Numbers
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Number
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 of
visitors
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in
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to
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island
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the island
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 who liked to be on
ship
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the ship
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 experienced a fluctuation before 2013, which was 0.5
million
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visitors
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.
Following
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this
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,
quantity
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the quantity
a quantity
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 of them gradually increased to 2
million
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 in 2017.
On the other hand
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, the volume of
visitors
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 who stayed on
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island
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the island
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 was almost 0.7
million
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 in 2000. For one year,
this
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 quantity didn't change, and
then
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 it
were
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apply
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gradually increased to 1.5
million
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visitors
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 in 2010, and remained steadily the same number until 2017, except for a small dip in 2016.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tourists
  • Caribbean
  • Visit
  • Graph
  • Summarize
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak season
  • Anomalies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparisons
  • Sector
  • Significant
  • Patterns
  • Overview
  • Analyze
  • Data
  • Year-on-year
  • Percentage
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