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Some Cities have vehicle free days when private cars, trucks, and motorcycles are banned from the city center. Public transportation likes buses, taxis, and metros are advised. To what extent do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
People
 would like to have a
pollution free
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 environment. Some states restrict private vehicles in the city area. The government give the advisory which is used public transports like buses, taxis and motors. In
this
 essay, the advantages are
then
 the disadvantages. I will explain in detail with examples.
To begin
 with positive points. If the vehicles are prohibited in cities,
then
this
 directly benefits to public.
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 benefit is
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a pollution
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pollution free
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 environment
then
people
 are healthier
the
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 past.
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, many governments are trying to
motivated
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 to owns citizens for
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 the cycle for office
,
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 and daily work and what
is
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 the benefits of that. The result,
people
are
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 observed from the
last
 few decades some improvements in
human
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 body and increased
the
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stamina in
people
 are
also
decrease
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decreases
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 the major illness cases
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 attack, lung infection, cough etcetera. On the other side,
people
 are struggling with their own
life
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lives
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 and
wastage
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waste
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 their own
time
 in public
transports
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transport
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. To explain, If
the
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people
are wants
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 to
going
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 somewhere
then
considering
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 some extra
time
for
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to
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 reach at location, because public
transports
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transport
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are
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 limited and
for
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specific
location
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not
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direct
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 reach their location,
due to
this
people
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people's
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 stress
level
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levels
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 will
be increased
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.
Moreover
, they have given
to
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limited hours to family, because mostly
time
spend
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 in
office
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the office
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 or travelling.
For instance
, as per survey reports
of
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 WHO,
mostly
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most
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 working
person
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people
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 are spending
the
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30
percent
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 of
time
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 of life
in
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travelling.
Hence
,
due to
this
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is
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 increased
than
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 the past few years. In conclusion,
this
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 essay we have discussed both
the
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views, but both are important. I believe that the advantages are more preferred than the disadvantages. If the environment is healthy
then
people
 are automatically healthy.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay presents a coherent argument, structuring your points from advantages to disadvantages effectively. However, to score higher, aim for better logical transitions between your ideas. Use linking phrases such as 'consequently', 'additionally', or 'on the contrary' to connect your paragraphs and sentences more smoothly.
task achievement
You effectively address the topic by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of having vehicle-free days. To improve your task achievement score, ensure that your argument comprehensively covers the scope by presenting a more balanced view of both advantages and disadvantages. Additionally, clarify your stance in the conclusion more decisively.
coherence cohesion
While your essay demonstrates a good level of cohesion, enhancing your essay's cohesion can be achieved through clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph. These sentences should succinctly introduce the main idea of the paragraph, making it easier for the reader to follow your argument.
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