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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbear island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbear island between 2010 and 2017.
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The graph clarified the figures of those people who visited a Caribbean
island
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 in 2010_2017.
Overall
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, there are gradual increase in the number of
visitors
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 in that period.
Firstly
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, visiting the
island
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 those
visitors
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 who were staying on cruise ships witnessed a stunning rise in the number of
visitors
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 in that period.
For instance
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, the percentage of
visitors
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 in 2010 was 0.3% and completely increased to 2% in 2017.
In addition
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, visiting the
island
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 by those
visitors
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 who were staying on the
island
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 found an exciting rise in figures of
visitors
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 in that period.
For example
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, the proportion of
visitors
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 in 2010 was 0.7% and totally dropped to 1.5% in 2017.
Moreover
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, the total of
visitors
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 in 2010 was estimated at 1% and changed in 2017 to 3.5 %. We notice from the graph there is a large number of
visitors
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 from cruise ships compared to
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 and
this
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 increased by about 1%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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