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some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineerss, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Few populations think that professionals,
such
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 as doctors and engineers, should be needed to
work
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 in the nation where they finished their coaching. other trust they should be eligible to
work
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 in other status if they want. I will discuss both the problems below. To commence with,
according to
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 a certain amount of crowd, white-collar should get a job permit in their own country itself not in another because, if these professionals start to
work
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 somewhere else there will be a lack of talent in that land where they get training which will lead to a lot of medical issues
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 the lifestyle of that country will stop being developing. which will affect the economy and growth.
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, each kingdom has its own rules and regulations which sometimes affect the treating family.
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, A group of
community
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communities
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 want to settle abroad in search of better physical and mental health
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, Getting a
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 permit in a preferred place is a very difficult process
for example
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 In Canada out of 100 only 10 people will get a permanent residency. most humans think of coming back to their own country after a few years of struggle because of the unsuitable environment, sending their money back to their land to become rich.
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 getting a job is difficult for all international
family
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families
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 who are coming from outside. without reference, it's difficult to get it. In conclusion, I want to say that both are basic needs of humans to understand their family background, the pressure of becoming popular, to become wealthy by all means.
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 decision depends on that person to person. it should not depend on society.
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Introduction Enhancement
Introduction: Aim to clarify your thesis statement more distinctly to guide the reader through your viewpoint and the structure of the essay.
Evidence and Examples
Supporting Examples: Incorporate more concrete and specific examples to support each viewpoint, enhancing the clarity of your arguments.
Sentence Structure
Complex Sentences: Practice using a variety of complex sentence structures to demonstrate linguistic capability and enhance readability.
Paragraph Structure
Paragraphing: Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea, using clear topic sentences and cohesive devices effectively.
Argument Clarity
Clarity: Work on clarifying your ideas and positions on the issues discussed. Avoid overgeneralisation and ensure your arguments are well-defined.
Conclusion Enhancement
Conclusion: Strengthen your conclusion by more clearly summarizing the discussed views and explicitly stating your own position with supporting rationale.
Topic Understanding
You have successfully discussed both sides of the issue, showing an understanding of the topic.
Structure Adherence
The essay structure is followed, with a clear division into paragraphs.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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