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In the future, all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers

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If in the future modes of transportation
such
 as cars, buses, and trucks ride exclusively with passengers without a driver, how much should mechanics and
technology
 be developed for
this
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to control different situations that
people
 can trust and ride without a driver
.
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 Maybe some will see it as an aspiration for the future and development. Either way, I do not think it's going to be that easy. Most likely, it will be in demand for the first time and interest of
people
 from all over the world. But they can not know, what the consequences might be
afterward
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. I have to admit that
technology
 is advancing every day, and I can not deny its benefits. On one hand, they can make life easier, but I personally believe that the benefits of the automobile do not outweigh the benefits of the driver. To give you an example, I will point out that any
technology
 can fail and deviate from the norm. In situations like
this
, there has to be someone in charge and in control of the situation.
At the end
 of the day, we are talking about human life and it is important to take it seriously. There is another example: if
this
 happens, there could be another problem. Many
people
 will lose their jobs as
technology
 replaces
people
.
Therefore
, in my opinion,
this
 is not a good idea. Taking everything into consideration, all I'm saying is that every side of the coin has a flip side. What I'm getting at is that it can be a good thing, but again, it can have huge consequences. It's very important to take
this
 subject seriously.
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task response
Your essay addresses the topic, but a clearer stance or view regarding driverless vehicles in the introduction could enhance your task response.
coherence and cohesion
The logical flow of your essay is generally good. To improve coherence, you might consider using more linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas.
task achievement
Including more detailed, specific examples to support your arguments could strengthen your essay, making your discussion more persuasive and comprehensive.
task response
You've shown a good level of understanding of the topic and included relevant arguments concerning the potential issues with driverless vehicles.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarises your viewpoint, demonstrating a good structure.
task achievement
Your willingness to acknowledge both the positive and negative aspects of driverless technology shows a well-rounded approach to the question.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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