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The graph illustrates the amount of visitors in Europan areas ( coast, mountains and lakes) from 1987 to 2007.

The graph illustrates the amount of visitors in Europan areas ( coast, mountains and lakes) from 1987 to 2007.
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The line graph presents the number of tourists in three variety areas in Europe from the year 1987 to 2007 comprising of coast, mountains and lakes. The unit on the Y-axis is shown in thousands.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 European holidaymakers mostly decide to visit the coastline.
However
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, in some years they pick the lakes as their primary terminal.
To begin
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 with, the coast started the period at 40 before fluctuating to 50 in 1997
while
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 the lakes began at 10,000
then
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 significantly increased to 40 in 1997. The continuous rise of the areas by the sea was shown and ended the period around 75, meanwhile, the lake tourists surged to 75 in 2002 surpassed the coastline before dropping to 50, in 2007.
On the other hand
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, the mountains were at 20, which was in second place, in 1987
then
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 minimally rose to 30 in 1997. Afterwards, it hovered at
this
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 number for a
while
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,
then
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 gradually shot up to 35 in the year 2007, ending the period in the
last
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 place.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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