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Houses are essential for people. Some people think that the government should offer free houses for people who cannot afford to pay for it. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Housing is a fundamental human need, yet many
families
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 still lack a home of their own. In Colombia, data from DANE (2024) shows that only around 40% of
families
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 own their houses, another 40% live in rental accommodation, and the remaining 20% face other arrangements. These numbers highlight the importance of public policies that help
families
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 access decent housing and address one of their most basic needs. Supporters of stronger welfare policies argue that the government should provide free housing to those who cannot afford it. They believe
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 initiatives could boost people’s living standards, increase household consumption, and create positive economic effects through the construction sector, which in turn would raise aggregated demand.
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,
this
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 perspective often underestimates a key challenge
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 governments operate under budget constraints and must make careful decisions about where to allocate limited resources. In Colombia,
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, the government implemented the program “Mi Casa Ya”, which provided subsidies for
families
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 earning up to four minimum wages.
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 the National Planning Department, the program helped many
families
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 escape poverty. Still, it
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 revealed important flaws. Some beneficiaries exploited the system, buying
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 houses not as homes but as investments. In these cases, the program did not serve its original purpose of guaranteeing shelter for those in real need, but
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 fueled misuse and inefficiency. In conclusion,
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 I agree that housing is a basic need and that public policy should address it, I partly disagree with the idea that governments should provide free housing for everyone who cannot afford it.
This
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 approach is neither financially sustainable nor socially efficient.
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, governments should focus on essential responsibilities—
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 as security, education, and health—
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 designing housing policies that are targeted, transparent, and less vulnerable to abuse.

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State your view clearly in the first paragraph. A short sentence that says you agree or disagree, then tell what you will discuss.
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Use simple linking words to move from one idea to the next, like also, but, and, for example, therefore.
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Add more proof for each idea. One real fact or example helps a lot.
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Clear view and use of data about housing in Colombia.
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Good layout with intro, body, and conclusion.
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Balanced view with both need and limits of policies.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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