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You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. In your letter, tell your friend about the party ask for the recipe explain ntwhy you need the recipe from his/her country

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Hello June, Recently, I was thinking about throwing a get-together
party
 for my school friends.
This
 is a holiday month and the perfect time to throw a
party
 so that all of us have the time to join. I was thinking of having foreign cuisine at the
party
 as one of my friends loves to try new tastes.
That is
 why, I am writing
this
 to you for the recipe of your special Chicken Kebab. It is your country's delicacy and your special ingredients make it a perfect item to have at my
party
. So being my only friend in Iran, will you please send me your special recipe for Chicken Kebab? I will be more than happy and thankful to have
this
 dish cooked with your special touch. I would like to video call you
while
 cooking so that I will not mess anything up. With Love, Rahul
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Coherence & Cohesion
Your letter neatly organizes the information into paragraphs, each with a clear purpose. For future letters, consider adding more transitions between paragraphs for an even smoother flow.
Task Achievement
You've effectively addressed all parts of the task with a friendly and appropriate tone. To further improve, you might consider adding more detail about the party or further explaining the significance of including a dish from your friend's country.
Structure & Flow
The letter demonstrates a good structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs that each focus on a different aspect of the task (the party, the request for the recipe, and why you want the recipe), and a warm closing.
Tone & Respect
Your choice of words and tone throughout the letter are well-suited to the context, creating a friendly and respectful request that acknowledges your friend's expertise and the value of their cultural cuisine.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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