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The chart below shows the depth of snow (in cm) in a particular ski resort in Canada in three individuals years.

The chart below shows the depth of snow (in cm) in a particular ski resort in Canada in three individuals years.
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The given chart provides information on centimetres of
snow
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 laid in specific ski areas in Canada in three particular years from November to April.
Overall
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, it can seen in the chart that ski destinations in Canada start snowing heavily from February to April as opposed to other months despite the
year
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.
Moreover
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, it raises in order over the given months. The only month when the average
snow
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 depth slightly fluctuated from approximately 90 to 110
cm
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 in all given years is November. In
december
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December
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 and
January
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January,
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 the least proportion of
snow
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 was in the second
year
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 (at about 60 and 120
cm
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 respectively) and both reached their picks at 150 and almost 200 appropriately in the third
year
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. In February and March of
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year
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years
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 two and three the depth of
snow
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 was the same 400 and 350
cm
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 respectively, only in the first month they had
at
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apply
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around
10
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a 10
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cm
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 difference. In
april
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April
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, the
snow
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 deepness rocketed from
year
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 one to
year
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 two with
the
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a
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 variance of a bit over 100
cm
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 and reached the bottom in the final
year
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 which was 300
cm
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words snow, year, cm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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