Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospitsal. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter -explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital -say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do -give details of when you would be available for this work

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Dear Sir or Madam, Greetings, I hope
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letter finds you in good health, I am writing to you concerning your advertisement in the local newspaper for individuals to do unpaid
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, and I would like to express my interest in applying for
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work
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. First of all, I would like you to be informed that I have worked as a volunteer in the local charity organization called WES for medical services,
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, I have been working in the Green Clinic for 18 months as a nurse. I would like to join your staff as a nurse as I have remarkable experience in
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field,
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I can apply my education and provide support,
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, I can recommend some of my former colleagues to join us.
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, I am free from 8 o'clock to 12 o'clock
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night, and I would like to make my shift during these hours. If you do not have
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for me
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time I mentioned, I do not mind to
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at the morning shift. I am looking forward to your kind reply. Best Regards. Omar San.
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task achievement
Your letter is generally well-structured but adding a bit more detail about why you want to help and specifics about what you can do would make it even better. For example, mentioning a personal motivation for wanting to help at this particular hospital can make your letter more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Using more varied transition words can improve the logical flow of your letter. Right now, the ideas are clear but they can be better connected. For example, use transitions like 'Additionally,' 'Furthermore,' etc., to link sentences and paragraphs more smoothly.
task achievement
Your tone is very polite and suitable for a formal letter, which enhances the professionalism of your application.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, contributing to a clear structure and making it easy for the reader to follow.
coherence cohesion
You have included both a greeting and a closing, which makes your letter well-rounded and complete.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • volunteer
  • unpaid work
  • free time
  • dedication
  • healthcare
  • assist
  • patients
  • administrative tasks
  • commitment
  • flexibility
  • personal satisfaction
  • inspired
  • community service
  • contribute
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