The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. ( task 1, cam 13 test 1)

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The maps illustrate the

city

hospital, connecting with

road

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the road

a road

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in 2007 and 2010. The general overview is that the way to access a hospital is connected with two roundabouts.

Moreover

, the parking area was developed to be more relevant and rational with the

road

According to

the map in 2007, it can be seen that people can go to the

city

hospital which

located

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is located

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in the north of the

city

junction by

bus

or personal car. For those travelling by

bus

, there were

bus

stops along two sides of the hospital

road

While

who have a personal car, driving

pass

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past

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the hospital

road

, heading to the ring

road

around the

city

hospital can park in the car park for

public

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the public

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and staff, located at the right-hand side of the hospital avenue. Moving on to the

road

after development in the next three years, the junction was turned into a roundabout,

the

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and the

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left area of hospital

road

was

also

turned into a

bus

station, connecting to one more roundabout before entering the ring

road

Additionally

, there was a new parking lot constructed on the east side of the

city

hospital.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road, bus with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

189 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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