Different types of environmental pollution seem to be affecting an increasing number of people in the world. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what solutions would you suggest?
Environmental issues have been problems that affect people in the world significantly. There are several human actions that lead to the damage of
nature
. Due to
this
fact, the government
should come up with regulations to control human behaviours that affect nature
.
One of the possible causes is human behaviours that affect the environment
directly. This
happens because many individuals do not have a concern about nature
and only take advantage of their surroundings without preserving them. For example
, many factories from the textile industry in Indonesia are built in residential areas and throw their chemical wastes into water areas without purifying them. Consequently
, the environment
and people around them are poisoned because of toxic materials.
One immediate practical solution is to make a regulation about the environment
and impose severe punishments for offenders. However
, this
action should be done by the government
because they have the authority to audit factories and also
individuals. After the regulations are made, the offenders would think twice before taking an action that might affect the environment
. For instance
, the government
should sentence the factory which is proven throwing their waste illegally with a huge amount of money as a penalty. Undoubtedly, the regulation could prevent the increase in pollution that is
caused by human habits.
To conclude
, the government
should regulate human actions and impose harsh punishments for the offenders of environmental issues. These actions should be implemented due to
the fact that the root of environmental pollution comes from humans. As a result
, this
solution could prevent people from damaging nature
consciously and unconsciously.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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