You have recently read a book about a city you know well and found some incorrect information. Write a letter to the author. In your letter tell him/her of the incorrect information give him/her the correct information explain why they should correct it.

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Dear Mrs. Jackson, Hope you are fine,

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is Maria Sobhani

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Iran. I studied historical science at university and my thesis was about Tehran.

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, I have decided to mention two errors I found in your book.

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, Tajrish

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was not build

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in Qajar time.

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and its surrounding area used to be a village and many of its

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were farmers. During the early years of

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the Pahlavi

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dynasty, Reza Shah, the ruler of Iran, decided to construct

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and

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Pahlavi Road to provide

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better access to the middle part of Tehran. The next point you might be interested to consider is that the railroad in Tehran is not located in the western part of the city but in the southern part of it. It can

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be accessed via Pahlavi Road, which starts from Tajrish

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. Thanks for your consideration and I hope

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information finds you well, Best Regards, Maria

Submitted by mojgan.sobhani on Sat Jun 01 2024

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greeting and closing

In the closing, you might want to thank the author for their work and express a positive note about the book overall before diving into the corrections.

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You have provided clear and specific information regarding the inaccuracies, which fulfills the task response effectively.

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The tone of the letter is respectful and professional, which is very suitable for this kind of correspondence.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

160 words

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