The table below gives information about students enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
Table
illustrates the Add an article
The table
number
of student enrollments at Bristol University, highlighting the change in two different categories based on gender
and origin in the span of eight decades from 1928 to 2008.
Initially
, the number
of admissions in 1928 were
as low as in 1928, when the Change the verb form
was
number
was only 218 students
. However
, the amount started to grow rapidly to 1046 students
after 30 years,
and ended up with 6377 enrollments in 2008.
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apply
While
the percentages of the gender
were generally equal in 1928 at
42% of them were female Change preposition
apply
students
and the rest were male students
at 58%. Although
the portion of male students
who enrolled in 1958 dominated 68%. Recently, the percentage
of gender
returns
to a similar Wrong verb form
returned
percentage
of 54% female
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of female
students
and 46% of male students
in 2008.
Lastly
, the proportion of students
who came from within 30 miles of Bristol were
50%, and only 5% of Change the verb form
was
students
came from overseas. In 1958, the percentage
of Bristol residents dropped to 14%, while
only 6% students
from abroad. Change preposition
of students
Instead
in 2008, the percentage
of students
who came from overseas grew significantly to 28%, and this
data was in contrast
with the number
of nearby students
at only 1-2%.
Overall
, the admission growth over the period given had multiplied constantly; while
,
the Remove the comma
apply
percentage
of gender
and area of origin changes over time.Submitted by kelly on
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