The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking the visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking the visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period
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information on the percentage of satisfaction of Ashdown Museum
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, after and before establishing some improvement on the Museum.The segments represent different categories including (Very satisfied, satisfied, dissatisfied, very dissatisfied, and No response)
Overall
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it is clear that
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experience has enhanced and
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of
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their satisfaction has increased after
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establishing
refurbishement
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refurbishment
. Before
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refurbishment
, a substantial portion of the chart is dedicated to those who expressed their dissatisfaction, accounting for 40%.
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individuals who reported very dissatisfied represent 30% of the total responses. Followed by 15% who were satisfied and 10% who reported very satisfied, only 5% gave no response. After
refurbishement
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refurbishment
, a substantial portion of the chart is dedicated to those who expressed their satisfaction, accounting for 40%.
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individuals who reported
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satisfied represent 35% of the total responses. On the negative side, 15% of the
visitors
after the improvement were dissatisfied and 5% reported very dissatisfied, only 5% gave no response. In summary, it is worth noting that
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experience has significantly increased after the
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refurbishment
, representing
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large proportion of the total responses.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, refurbishement with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "substantial" was used 2 times.

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