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All children should study a foreign language in school starting in the earliest grades. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People believe that everybody must learn a
language
 different from their native since the first grade. I completely agree with
this
 statement and I will explain my position by analysing the benefits
children
 get with
this
 knowledge
besides
 the improvement in the community's level of life. Some of the main pros of learning a foreign
language
 are: that enhances the level of education, develops new skills by including new brain zones into the learning process and brings opportunities to learn from different cultures, countries and communities. As an illustration, the
children
 who are involved in foreign
language
 learning usually have the opportunity to apply to an exchange program, that way they can
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 their abilities in the
language
 and temporarily live with an abroad family who will share with them all the customs and way of living from that country. The knowledge they get from these experiences is invaluable and if they weren't learning a different
language
, they couldn't have it.
Furthermore
,
While
children
 are taught a foreign
language
, communities will notice how it impacts the level of life.
For instance
, in tourist cities
such
 as Cartagena, San Andres and Madrid, those in which people who interact with tourists speak their
language
 will have more visitants
therefore
 more incomes.
As a result
, they will improve the way they live.
To conclude
, teaching
children
 a foreign
language
 is paramount not only for them but for the community. I believe
this
 should be a priority in governments' education programs. Speaking different languages improves city incomes and it is attractive to new and more visitants.
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