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The graph shows the values of agricultural items imported and exported inside the European Union between 1999 and 2008.

The graph shows the values of agricultural items imported and exported inside the European Union between 1999 and 2008.
The graph illustrates the export and import values of agricultural goods within the European Union from 1999 to 2008. The vertical axis represents the monetary value in million euros,
while
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 the horizontal axis lists the years from 1999 to 2008. The graph categorizes agricultural
trade
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 into several components: commodities, intermediate
products
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, final
products
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, and confidential
trade
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. From 1999 to 2008, there is a noticeable trend in the composition of agricultural
trade
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. Both
exports
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 and
imports
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 include all four categories, but the final
products
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 consistently dominate both
exports
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 and
imports
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 across the years. In terms of
exports
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, the value steadily increases over the period, with final
products
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 being the most significant component, followed by intermediate
products
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 and commodities.
Imports
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 show a similar trend, with final
products
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also
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 being the largest category. The
trade
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 balance fluctuates slightly but generally stays close to the zero mark, suggesting a relatively balanced
trade
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 in agricultural goods over these years.
However
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, towards 2008, the
trade
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 balance appears to dip, indicating a slight increase in
imports
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 over
exports
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words trade, products, exports, imports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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