The table below shows the changes in participation levels in various sports in the USA between 2010 and 2014 for people aged 18 and 34.

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The table compares the number of 18 and 34-year-old Americans participating in various sports in 2010 and 2014.

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, it can be seen that running is still the most popular activity and the least popular is still baseball,

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, the numbers have changed significantly. The table shows that the sports in which people were more motivated to take part in 2014 were running, hiking and yoga. Running and yoga have both increased by 3

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in the four-year period. Yoga increased from 9 to 12

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running rose from 15 to 18

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individuals in 2014.

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, 2

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additional participants took up hiking

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of the period.

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, people find team sports less interesting than individual activities. Basketball, baseball and softball all have between 1,2 and 1,6

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fewer participants. People are

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much less inspired by swimming in 2014 than in 2010. It dropped by 2,5

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individuals in the end. The one sport that showed little change was weightlifting, which fell down just by 0,2% during

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time period.

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The table below shows the changes in participation levels in various sports in the USA between 2010 and 2014 for people aged 18 and 34.

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