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As Earth runs out of natural resources, we have started to look to space for solutions. However, some people argue that this is the wrong thing to do, and instead, we should look for alternative solutions here on Earth. To what extent do you agree with them? What alternatives might there be to exploiting space for natural resources? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, many companies are exploring
space
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, as they believe it may be useful either for
resources
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 or to live on another planet.
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, many people think that our knowledge about the
earth
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 is not enough, and still, there are many things to explore that will help us in finding solutions. I agree with the second statement as there are a lot of things on
earth
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 that we do not know about.
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space
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 contains a huge amount of minerals that will be helpful for us, still, we should not focus on it as on
earth
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 there are many types of useful minerals. Utilize what we have and discover it will take less time and
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 will help us to reach faster progress in different kinds of work.
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, we should pay attention to regenerating these
resources
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 rather than trying to find a different way to get them.
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, the recycling process
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 done by many countries has a positive effect on reusing
resources
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.
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, rather than investing huge amounts of money in exploring
space
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, we should invest in the environment. Many
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 companies are using large amounts of money, minerals and time to go to
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while
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 if we take these
resources
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 to improve nature we will have great results and a lot of
resources
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.
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, rather than trying to find if there is oxygen on Mars, we should seed more trees on
Earth
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 to get oxygen. In conclusion, exploring
space
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 may have many benefits, and it could be useful for us, but before that, we should turn our eyes to
Earth
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 and look at what we have and how we can use it and make it beneficial.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • sustainability
  • circular economy
  • recycling
  • waste management
  • resource-intensive
  • environmental regulations
  • corporate responsibility
  • global cooperation
  • resource scarcity
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