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The pie charts below show the sources of the electricity produced in four countries between 2003 and 2008

The pie charts below show the sources of the electricity produced in four countries between 2003 and 2008
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The pie charts compare supplies of
electricity
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 in
India
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,
Sweden
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,
Morocco
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, and
Vietnam
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 mainly for 5 years. It is observed that the most significant amounts of
electricity
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 were produced from
hydropower
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 and fossil
fuels
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.
Morocco
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's and
Sweden
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's electropower depended on
hydropower
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,
while
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India
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 and
Vietnam
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 took much of their energy from fossil
fuels
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.
In contrast
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 to all countries,
Sweden
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 was the only country that used nuclear
power
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 extensively, with high demand,
while
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India
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 used some, but not as much.
And the
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 remaining two countries did not use nuclear
power
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 as a source of
electricity
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.
According to
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 the diagrams,
Morocco
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 dominated in utilizing
hydropower
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 for its energy supply, with 95.5%. The second country is
Sweden
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; its hydroelectric
power
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 accounted for 52%,
whereas
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 its main supply came from nuclear
power
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, which provided 44%. The remaining least amount of
electricity
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 in these two countries was obtained from fossil
fuels
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 (
Morocco
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 4.5% and
Sweden
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 4%).
On the contrary
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, in
Vietnam
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 and
India
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, the main sources of
electricity
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 were produced by fossil
fuels
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.
While
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India
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 relied heavily on fossil
fuels
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, with a percentage of 81.9%,
Vietnam
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's
electricity
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 supply was made up of
this
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 source by almost 56%. Interestingly, the usage of
hydropower
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 was responsible for 14.6% of
electricity
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 in
India
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, but in
Vietnam
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,
this
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 percentage was almost 44%. Similar to
Sweden
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,
India
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's
electricity
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 supply used nuclear
power
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, even though it was not a popular type of
electricity
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 production (3.5%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, sweden, morocco, vietnam, hydropower, fuels, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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