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The bar chart depicts the distribution of income groups, namely low (40,000 dollars or less), lower middle (40,00 - 70,000 dollars), middle (70,000 - 120,00 dollars), and high (120,000 dollars or more) in the cities and the regional centers of Australia.

The bar chart depicts the distribution of income groups, namely low (40,000 dollars or less), lower middle (40,00 - 70,000 dollars), middle (70,000 - 120,00 dollars), and high (120,000 dollars or more) in the cities and the regional centers of Australia.
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The bar chart illustrates the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. The income groups are categorized as low (
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 40,000 or less), lower middle (
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 40,000 -
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 70,000), middle (
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 70,000 -
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 120,000), and high (
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 120,000 or more).
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, the lower middle and middle-income groups have the highest percentages in both cities and regional centres,
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 the high-income
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 has the lowest percentage in both areas. Specifically, in cities, the lower middle-income
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 has the highest proportion, accounting for 30% of the population, followed by the middle-income
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 at 27%. The high-income
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 constitutes 22%, and the low-income
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 represents 21% of the population. In regional centres, the distribution differs slightly. The
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 is the most prevalent, making up around 34% of the population. The middle-income
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 follows with approximately 21%,
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 the low-income
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 is slightly higher at 22%. The high-income
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 has the lowest representation at 15%.
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