The pie charts show the sales of new cars in Australia in 1984, 2004 and 2013.

The pie charts show the sales of new cars in Australia in 1984, 2004 and 2013.
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The charts compare how many new
cars
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were sold in Australia in the years 1994, 2004 and 2023.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the sales of sedans saw a significant decrease,
while
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the figure for other
cars
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rose gradually.
However
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, the total sale of
cars
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went up rapidly over the period.
To begin
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, in 1984
there
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were sold 42,900
cars
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in total,
whereas
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in 2003
this
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figure was
a
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much higher, at 71,000 but in 2013 it witnessed the highest
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among other years, at 85,000. In the year 1994, the sales of sedans experienced the highest proportion, at 74% which was followed by a quick decline in 2004 and 2013, at 62% and 51%, respectively. Regarding other types of
cars
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, in 1994 it stood at 19%, and
then
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the figure grew
up
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moderately to 21% and 32%, in 2004 and 2013, in turn.
In contrast
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, the sales of SUVs
cars
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was
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were
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only 7% in 1994 before witnessing a slight growth to 17% in 2004.
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, it remained
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in 2013.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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