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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweight the disadvantages?

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In the recent era, the rise of automated
vehicles
 is taking place, where it is believed that the people using these
vehicles
 for their journey will be the only ones inside.
This
 essay will discuss the advantages of
vehicles
 operated by AI
along with
 some serious drawbacks to society and jobs.
To begin
 with, many organisations have developed certain AI
models
 which can control the
overall
 operation of a vehicle without any need for human input,
although
 these
models
 were specially designed for operating the small sized
vehicles
 in huge factories and warehouses, some car manufacturers have
also
 started to implement these AI
models
 in their products (cars, truck and trains) insisting that
vehicles
 operated with
driverless
technology
 are more accurate and efficient, with a positive rate of full accuracy
while
 executing a number of tasks.
This
 can be proven from an analysis conducted by the national government of Tanzania where these AI
models
 were tested in simulated traffic conditions and real-life scenarios were included
such
 as
models
 of pedestrians being placed around the corners and turns, surprisingly, the tasks were executed with an accuracy of hundred per cent in a more efficient way than a human could perform.
On the other hand
, if
driverless
technology
 is adopted on a massive scale
then
 there will be detrimental effects on society
such
 as the jobs related to driving and operating
vehicles
 will have
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negative impact,
moreover
, professionals who are already in
this
 profession will face frequent layoffs and the number of opportunities will be reduced
along with
 the growth in
this
 career will come to a stop. An example of
this
 prediction can be taken from a survey conducted in the year of 2014 where around 90% of warehouse workers lost their jobs
due to
 organisations starting to adopt
driverless
technology
, for these reasons I don't think that the advantages of automated
driverless
technology
 outweigh the disadvantages.
To conclude
, introducing AI-operated
vehicles
 can be a safe and efficient method for organisations allowing them to save their expenses on hiring professionals,
on the contrary
,
this
 can affect the livelihood of workers if
driverless
technology
 is implemented on a large scale.
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