The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas

The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas
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The following diagram represent the construction of a
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area made from concrete canvas. Starting with Manufacturing process and culminating with storing.
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, it can be clearly observed that there are three main steps: manufacturing,constucting, and setting, before the
storage
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is complete.
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, it is interesting to note
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storage
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built with simple yet sophisticated material.
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with, the production of key material called Concrete canvas. These rectangualr shape blocks are composed with three unique components: fibrous top surface, the dry concrete, and a water-resistant layer in the bottom. Once the material is finished, it will be delivered and unwrapped at the building site. After that, these cubes are unpacked and spreaded on the ground by a truck as large as 10 meters. To prevent damage, it is covered with a gigantic plastic sheeth that secure with pegs arround the corner of it.
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, the construction of a building begin with the the arrangement of blocks into an igloo-like design with a door on it. The airpumper is responsible for pumping air inside it. Next step is watering, the workers will watering outside
this
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8 meters height
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.
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, Setting is the final steps which we will leave it dry and allow concrete to solidified for about 20-24 hours. If dried, the project now
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completed and ready to be use.
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