The chart below shows male and female fitness membership in Thailand between 1985 and 2015

The chart below shows male and female fitness membership in Thailand between 1985 and 2015
Information pertaining to how many people go to
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fitness in gender from 1985 to 2015 has been provided in the given bar chart.
It is clear that
the number of female members increased
while
males
witnessed a decrease.
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Additionally
, the figure in gender was greatest in 2010. Looking at the
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details, it can be seen that in 1985, there were nearly 2200
males
in fitness, compared with 1300 females. Over five years,
male
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significantly increased to approximately 3800 before dropping sharply to 1800 in 2000. In the meantime,
female
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witnessed a slight rise to 1900 in 1990
then
continued increasing steadily to 2800 in 2000. Moving on to
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period
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. In 2005, female fitness membership went down to just nearly 2200
while
this
figure for
males
experienced a slow increase to 2010. After that, both
males
and females witnessed a climb to reach the peak
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2950 and 5000 respectively in 2010. 5 years later,
at the end
of the period, females doubled
males
at 2000 to 1000.
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