You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like bout the cafeteria say what is wrong suggest how it could be improved

Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. My name is Anastassia, and I am a medical student in the college. I'm writing
this
letter with the purpose of discussing the quality of lunches in our student's
cafeteria
.
Firstly
, I want to express my sincere admiration for your magazine. You are doing a great job, and I witnessed a few times your help for students with a variety of problems.
Secondly
, let me explain the problem I wanted to talk about. You were probably aware of the prices in the
cafeteria
. If I had time I would go eat somewhere else.
But unfortunately
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, I do have not enough time during the day, so I have only one place to go.
Moreover
, I suppose that I'm not alone. All of the food in the
cafeteria
is always cold, and the meat is tough, and it's uneatable. I think we have to think about a new company which is processing our
cafeteria
. Maybe you could organise a survey of the students about the
cafeteria
service, and maybe ask them how they want to see their lunches. Best regards, thanks a lot. Anastassia.
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Include specific examples or incidents to make the problems and suggested solutions more compelling and relatable.
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Take care with minor grammatical errors and ensure consistency (e.g., 'uneatable' should be 'inedible').
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The letter addresses all the required points clearly.
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Your tone is polite and appropriate for a letter to a magazine.
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The greeting and signing off are effectively done.

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