You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like bout the cafeteria say what is wrong suggest how it could be improved

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Good afternoon, dear sir/madam. My name is Anastassia, and I am a medical student in the college. I'm writing

this

letter with the purpose of discussing the quality of lunches in our student's

cafeteria

Firstly

, I want to express my sincere admiration for your magazine. You are doing a great job, and I witnessed a few times your help for students with a variety of problems.

Secondly

, let me explain the problem I wanted to talk about. You were probably aware of the prices in the

cafeteria

. If I had time I would go eat somewhere else.

But unfortunately

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Unfortunately

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, I do have not enough time during the day, so I have only one place to go.

Moreover

, I suppose that I'm not alone. All of the food in the

cafeteria

is always cold, and the meat is tough, and it's uneatable. I think we have to think about a new company which is processing our

cafeteria

. Maybe you could organise a survey of the students about the

cafeteria

service, and maybe ask them how they want to see their lunches. Best regards, thanks a lot. Anastassia.

Submitted by anastasia on Fri Aug 23 2024

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Take care with minor grammatical errors and ensure consistency (e.g., 'uneatable' should be 'inedible').

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Your tone is polite and appropriate for a letter to a magazine.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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6 paragraphs

186 words

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