The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

The diagram below shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.
The given process below illustrates the recycling of
aluminum
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cans
for soda, which demand six weeks for all
stages
.
Overall
, there are 11
stages
. It begins with the transportation of
already used
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cans
by specialized machines and ends with rolling a new can from the whole metal list. The first
stage
is delivering already sorted and collected
aluminum
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cans
by specialized transport to a deposit
center
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. There are
the
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number of
stages
that had to be done in the deposit
center
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. In the third
stage
, the
cans
were washed from all dirt and
also
cleaned from
inside
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. In the next
stage
, the
cans
are crushed into small pieces for the next
stages
. In the middle of
stages
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,
cans
are processed in another factory. In
this
factory, crushed pieces were added chemicals to erase all trash and
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from them. In the seventh
stage
, little pieces were heated by electrical spirals and melted. After that, the bricks of melted
aluminum
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would weigh to the exact weight.
Last
but not least, the
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bricks were rolled by a rolling circle press
for converting
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bricks to metal.
Finally
, the
aluminum
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list was converted to
aluminum
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cans
for soda or other liquids.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words aluminum, cans, stages, stage with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling process
  • aluminum cans
  • collection phase
  • sorting and cleaning
  • contaminants
  • crushing
  • melting phase
  • molded
  • energy efficiency
  • environmental benefits
  • economy
  • sustainable practices
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